A few days ago
yvetteb93021

Thesis Statement?

How would I turn this into a thesis statement? My teacher says it is purely observation and if I turned that in on a paper I would fail.

Generation Y has consumer habits unline any other geeration and they are revolutionizing the marketing world.

He also said “revolutionizing the marketing world” is bad because it sounds like I am selling someting.

Help please, I’m desperate.

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A few days ago
gcason

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Your thesis is too broad. Try being a little more specific. “Gen Y’s consumer habits are different from (Gen X, the Baby Boomers, or whatever you pick) and require different marketing techniques to reach.

Then, come up with about 3 or 4 good comparisons of differing marketing techniques. Keep focused, and you’ll be fine.

Stay away from “big” words like revolutionize. It’s pretty easy to back up different. It’s very hard to prove that something is revolutionary.

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