A few days ago
gravytrain036

TERRIBLE WRITER AGAIN!!!! Need proofreading help. Much appreciated!?

Okay, I am writing my conclusion paragraph, and I am having the hardest time. I am trying to include the three points that I had in my body paragraphs and rephrase my introductory paragraph. If you can think of a better way to reword this, pleae do… any suggestions, love to hear them.

Introduction Paragraph:

On March 20, 2003 the United States launched Operation Iraqi Freedom, in which the U.S. invaded Iraq. In the four years that have elapsed since then, Americans have grown tired of unfulfilled promises of Iraqi Democracy and weary of the severe costs, lives and money, to fund the war. This is evident from an initial approval of 70% at the launch of the war and a severe drop to 30% as of September 2007. As disapproval for the war increases, the likelihood for a pull out before the mission is accomplished becomes more and more evident. Realistically, a lasting democracy in Iraq is not a feat the United States can accomplish.

Conclusion paragraph so far… In add detail

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A few days ago
williamsonworks

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My attempt at a conclusion paragraph (which may or may not be better than yours):

The doubts about America’s ability to help an Iraqi democracy take root continue to mount. Iraqi history suggests that perhaps Iraqi society is not well-suited for a democratic form of government. As a colonial power, the British were unable to foster stability in Iraq. Observations seem to indicate that the Iraqis are increasingly resentful toward the American presence. Most of all, less than one-third of Americans currently approve of the continued American military deployment in Iraq. An American troop pullout from Iraq without accomplishing the mission originally set forth is a very real prospect.

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4 years ago
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The Iraqui Operation, released on March 20, 2003 wherein the U.S. invaded Iraqui; have grown individuals bored with empty supplies of Iraqi independence and weary of the severe expenditures, lives and money to fund the conflict throughout the time of those 4 years. jointly as on the launching of the conflict 70% of the inhabitants authorized it; by way of September 2007, there became a substantial drop to 30%. The disapproval and disbelief for the conflict will advance, the will for a pull out formerly the project is performed turns into much greater glaring. no longer basically united states of america is working out of money, yet additionally out of staying power for the Iraqui conflict. Hm… i in my opinion communicate spanish, and english isn’t my interior reach language… yet i’m bored haha. Sorry if its’s no longer smart.
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