pretty good! but i think hardships is supposed to be hardship. 🙂 good luck! &hearts

it’s good…for the sentence starting with “Whether by”-maybe it can read “Be it Douglas Spalding’s…” u know? also, trials and hardships kinda mean the same thing, i don’t know if u can think of another word to replace either of those two. maybe it can go: ‘Through imagination, hardships and rituals of summer, this story depicts the perfect example of the cyclical nature of life; expressed in many ways throughout the novel’. and at the end, don’t use ‘cyclical nature’ again, u may even want to cut that sentence altogether or add it onto something else. and the waking the town part, take out the “then” after the and. and try the “wave of HIS hand” instead of “a”. and instead of ‘yearly’ try ‘annual’. u could also totally ignore what i just said. i was an english major in college.

Wow! You sound literate. I am really impressed with this. I do offer one small suggestion. How about rewriting the first sentence? It could read better. ex. Dandelion Wine, by Ray Bradbury, is a tale about a boy’s magical summer. We already

know it is a book. Just my opinion.

“The old porch swings.” I think this is very good. You are going to be an excellent writer, if you choose to be one.

One nit: “Whether by…of each summer.” is an incomplete sentence.