First paragraph: Insert a comma after India

Second paragraph: You’ve used two versions of “influence” in one sentence. You should change one of them to another word. Also, I don’t think you need the colon before your list.

Third paragraph: I think you should replace your semi colon with a period and make “If she were to ignore…” the beginning of a new sentence.

Fourth paragraph: I don’t think you should start a paragraph with “However.” Replace “amount” with “number.” “Amount” is used for things you cannot count (such as sand), whereas “number” is used for things you can count (such as people). Take out “basically.” That word is almost always unnecessary.

Other than that, I think it is very well written.

Gilbert enjoys eating lavish pasta meals, drinking wine, and visiting the ancient Roman ruins.

Eat Pray Love’s audience includes a vast amount of people who like to read fascinating tales.

The only thing I might leave out is the colon that follows “Gilbert enjoys.” Otherwise, you did very well!

And believe me, I obsess about punctuation, grammar, and spelling!

WAIT, WAIT, WAIT. Sorry. Don’t forget to italicize “Eat Pray Love” in your paper.

or use spell check prick! is my gramer okay?