A few days ago
Anonymous

Need some help with writing this…?

I am working on an English assignment and it’s not due for a few weeks, but I want to get it out of the way. I am writing a narrative and I am drawing near the conclusion, but can’t figure out what to say at the end. This is the sentence I’m stuck on:

“My goal with writing this is to help people be more aware of situations like this and if my story can make a difference in at least a few people’s lives, then…”

Any ideas? I want to avoid being too sappy, but I can’t think of how to round this off. I’m willing to re-word it if it will sound better.

(This is ENG101, so it has to be somewhat decent)

(The situation is about being held up at gunpoint or other crimes and to raise awareness on how anywhere can be dangerous and anyone can be a target)

Thanks to those who answer!

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A few days ago
playwriter2180

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My goal in presenting this (topic, subject) is to educate people about (subject). The more people who know about this (topic, condition) the better off we will be in fighting for a (cure, change) in how this (subject, topic) is treated in the future.
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A few days ago
Jennifer L
Your sentence: My goal with writing this is to help people be more aware of situations like this and if my story can make a difference in at least a few people’s lives, then…

First, I’d drop the “situations like this” – you’ve used “this” two times to describe two different nouns. Perhaps for the second one you could say “aware of violent situations”…

I might end the sentence with something like “if I can make a difference in at least a few people’s lives, then perhaps my story might effort a small reduction violent crimes.” Or, something to that effect…it would be helpful to see the whole essay, but that at least one idea.

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