A few days ago
Anonymous

I need a few good sentences to end my story with.?

This is how it ends: please help construct my ending?????

King Litmus knew in his heart that his time was running out. Fourty-six men to however many thousands could not even be won by the greatest fighters of all time, the Spartans. Maybe he was crazy, he thought to himself. It wouldn’t be long now before his army would make its final stand a failure, and the Shakobb would be barging through the front door.

He took this time to look back on his life. All the wonderful things that had happened. From the birth of his two sons, to the day he was crowned king. He looked back on the many victorious battles he had won as a soldier and as king.

And at that very moment, the doors to his room opened and the top commander of the Shakobb army came into the room. As the door shut, and he fired his bow, and King Litmus saw the Gates of Heaven open in front of him.

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A few days ago
Anonymous

Favorite Answer

A. I am assuming this is a school assignment.

B. Never start a sentence with the word “and”… it will knock your grade down a letter before the proofreader ever gets started…

C. You don’t need the word “even” after “could not” … another letter grade down…

D. Some times its better to use a little more descriptive words as opposed to lots of pronouns, so that said, I would add in place of “He took this time to look back on his life” and I would type, “He reflected on all the wonderful adventures during his lifespan”….

E. there is probably a coma between “room” and “as”… also, not sure if it is smart to use “as” to start a sentence…

F…..you’ve actually done a great job, so you’re doing the same proofreading and editing I would do… I make most of the same mistakes, sometimes fresh eyes are the best way to see your mistakes.

G….. an idea for ending your sentence, just change the last one a little….because it has a great ending… just need a little fine tuning… ask a couple questions of your hero… what was he feeling? You have what he was thinking down pretty good… so maybe add that he “gasped” or “knew that he had given his all” as the front door burst open. Just some fine tuning, you have done a great job, just need a few tie together words…

hope this helped

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A few days ago
Anonymous
The arrow came flying straight at the King’s sweating temple. The commander then saw something unlike anything he’s every experienced. A blinding bolt of light exploded in front of him as if blades of glorious swords had met. The force threw him back against the door and before him stood the King, more mighty, more strengthened than ever.
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A few days ago
Anonymous
King Litmus then knew. He must use his 46 soldiers to help spread democracy and freedom thru the world. He will invade and when his mission is accomplished and Shakobb’s statue is torn down, only then will the insurgency be in its last throes. Years later as the battle still quelled he vowed to get the elusive Shakobb who was hiding somewhere around the Pakistan border. “Freedom must spread” he declared. If only he had a plan.
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A few days ago
Bobby Soxr Zombie
Leave it like that.

It says enough.

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A few days ago
Nora
And such is life. the end
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A few days ago
Temporary Sadness
and he whispered to them all: deez nutz!

the end

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A few days ago
trinity
when is a door, not a door—-when it is a jar
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A few days ago
Anonymous
and out steps st. peter to welcome him in
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