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She creates a story where the “bad fairy” (19) dressed in “big black boots” (19) ruins the peace in a kingdom by casting “a great dark mist” (211) of death, after the King and Queen do not invite her to the celebration of their first child, Princess Briar Rose.
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thats my best, sorry
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It’s a little long, but there is nothing wrong with it. It’s okay for a sentence to be somewhat lengthy – take a look at university texts where you find PAGE-LONG sentences!! Most people are accustomed to the ‘easy-read’ short sentences in newspapers and magazines, but long sentences are valid too.
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